Lead #3) Amtrak train "The Colonial" crashed into three more northbound trains at a switch station near Chase, Neb. at 1:30 this afternoon. Amtrak spokesman Larry Chase stated that all three diesel fueled Conrail trains ran a stop sign, causing the four train collision.
Lead #4A) All 40 passengers from Northwest Airlines Flight 428 were evacuated after arriving at the Municipal Airport in Lacrosse, Wis.
Upon landing, an air traffic controller noted smoke near the wheels of the plane from Minneapolis, Minn. The airliner was quickly cleared of all personnel.
Lead #4B) After three years, a missing boy from Brick Township, N.J. was recognized and reported as seen by a neighbor watching a television show about kidnapped children.
The 7-year-old's photo was posted after the movie "Adam: The Song Continues" aired Thursday night. Police located the child with his non-custodial mother Ellen Lynn Conner, 27, who now faces kidnapping and custody interference charges.
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ReplyDeleteCorrection, Lead #3 just posted. Hope it's better!
ReplyDeleteYes, it is better. But you know I can't leave (almost) well enough alone, so here's how I'd tweak it:
ReplyDeleteThe Amtrak train "The Colonial" collided with three northbound trains yesterday afternoon at a switch station near Chase, Md.
Amtrak spokesman Larry Chase said the three diesel Conrails apparently ran a stop sign.
"collided with" doesn't imply the Amtrak was at fault
location is in Maryland, not Nebraska (that was the fact error)
keep "apparently" in the comment about running a stop sign -- that's what the Amtrak spokesman said, and at this stage of an accident no one knows for sure.
4a) Get more info into the lead: All 40 passengers were evacuated from a Northwest Airlines jet yesterday at Lacrosse (Wisc.) Municipal Airport yesterday after an air traffic controller spotted smoke near its wheels.
ReplyDelete4b) Pack that lead with 5W/1H info: A boy missing for three years was found in Brick Township, N.J., last night after a neighbor recognized his photo on television and called the police.
Then you can explain about the TV movie and the charges against the mother.
Oops, I put "yesterday" in 4a twice ... don't do that. ;-]
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